{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12474807","dateCreated":"1243522032","smartDate":"May 28, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"fidan1993","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/fidan1993","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1235147613\/fidan1993-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12474807"},"dateDigested":1532767376,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comments","description":"i liked the example that you used, it went well with your story, also i liked how you set the beginning up.
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\ngood job :]","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12139665","dateCreated":"1242399262","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"mmcferran","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mmcferran","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12139665"},"dateDigested":1532767376,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"I liked how you incorporated a sport to make a point. You may want to check grammar things and try to cut out the excess fluff and add a little more about your belief.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12139461","dateCreated":"1242398950","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"desiree377","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/desiree377","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12139461"},"dateDigested":1532767376,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I really liked reading this story. My younger brother plays a lot of baseball so I am familiar with these situations and the emotions that come along with them. Putting that story in there really tied the whole piece together and was an excellent example of why you believe in what you believe in. Great job!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12007579","dateCreated":"1242141193","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kaygeo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kaygeo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12007579"},"dateDigested":1532767377,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments ","description":"Very well-written story. It was very powerful and you chose a great topic to write about. I also like how the story relates back to baseball, very cleaver. Great job!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12230341","body":"i agree that twisting baseball into your story made it more personal and powerful. it was well written and i liked how motivational it was. well done.","dateCreated":"1242746741","smartDate":"May 19, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"tylerjlhs","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/tylerjlhs","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"12007255","dateCreated":"1242140931","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dsk23","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dsk23","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12007255"},"dateDigested":1532767377,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"nice job. I would delete the sentence, "There is a story my dad and I always tell when someone is at an emotional low to get their confidence back up." Just flow right into the story. Also, try to be less technical in the D-back story, I kind of got lost a little bit.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12006833","dateCreated":"1242140498","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"oliviah15","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/oliviah15","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1222128529\/oliviah15-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12006833"},"dateDigested":1532767377,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"That was a great imspiring story. I enjoyed what you were saying because it was true in many ways. THe only thing i would suggest would be to just check your grammar and sentence construction because there was a few while reading.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12006653","dateCreated":"1242140225","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"etreb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/etreb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12006653"},"dateDigested":1532767377,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"Positive: I really liked the fact that you incoorperated a specific event to get your point across. I was very thought provoking as well because I thought of how many underdog teams often win.
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\nNegative: The only thing that you could have added was your emotions and feeling during that Diamondbacks game, it would have been pretty interesting.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12006909","body":"I agree with Etreb. Add how you felt while on the diamondbacks. That would open up a more personal feeling to it. I liked how you tied in the game and the lesson you were trying to teach.","dateCreated":"1242140583","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"wihbeyj","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/wihbeyj","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"12006349","dateCreated":"1242139832","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"Shayna_Jenkins","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Shayna_Jenkins","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224158020\/Shayna_Jenkins-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12006349"},"dateDigested":1532767377,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I liked how within this story, there was the story of the baseball game. I'm not a very positive person, so this was convincing story. The only thing I would change would be to incorporate something else about baseball besides the one game.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12006259","dateCreated":"1242139765","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dimariad","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dimariad","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12006259"},"dateDigested":1532767377,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"i liked how you picked a sport to back up your belief and the whole story worked really well. i noticed a jew places that could have used some puncuationf but not too much. it was really good","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}