{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12229875","dateCreated":"1242746013","smartDate":"May 19, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"fidan1993","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/fidan1993","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1235147613\/fidan1993-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12229875"},"dateDigested":1532767383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I loved it :]
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\nYou worded everything well and made it flow","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12026391","dateCreated":"1242161915","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"allie4522","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/allie4522","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237993324\/allie4522-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12026391"},"dateDigested":1532767383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I think you did a great job. You used your own experiences to back up what you believe and it shows that you care about what your writing.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12008369","dateCreated":"1242141977","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12008369"},"dateDigested":1532767383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"i like that you include your personal struggles and accomplishments. it makes what you believe easier to understand. my dad tells me i can do anything if i just work towards it. this essay says the same thing. good luck getting into your school.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12007183","dateCreated":"1242140842","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"mmcferran","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mmcferran","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12007183"},"dateDigested":1532767383,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"This was uplifting, inspiring and lifechanging. It was a real story of an experience that was turned around for the good instead of the bad. Kudos for you turning that situation around you taught us all the importance of looking on the bright side!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12006701","dateCreated":"1242140307","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dsk23","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dsk23","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12006701"},"dateDigested":1532767384,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":" I can understand completely what you went through and I think that even those who have not yet gone through the process can too, which is really good. I just didnt understand this statement, "I wasn\u2019t about to leave my future undecided for any reason."","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12006555","dateCreated":"1242140095","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kaygeo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kaygeo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12006555"},"dateDigested":1532767384,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I really enjoyed reading this, it was very personal. I found it very relatable for many kids and this made me want to keep reading. Well-written and powerful.
\nI did spot some minor grammatical errors when I was reading.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12006455","dateCreated":"1242139959","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"wihbeyj","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/wihbeyj","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12006455"},"dateDigested":1532767384,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"From your writing, you can tell how much this college means to you. You made the essay very personal and showed how much you desired to go to the college. I also thought that you made the essay more interesting by tying the lesson you learned into your life, so it wasnt only about colleges.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12005365","dateCreated":"1242139037","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"etreb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/etreb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12005365"},"dateDigested":1532767384,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"
\nPositive: This is a very good topic and a very real and up to date one. I was especially fond of it because it is something that all of us will go through when we apply to college. Very straight and to the point and I also liked how to tied it into your own life.
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\nNegative: There were some minor gramatic errors that can be found with another revision. Such as "You\u2019ll most likely find that there\u2019s always some good in it you never saw before."","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12005227","dateCreated":"1242138953","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"Shayna_Jenkins","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Shayna_Jenkins","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224158020\/Shayna_Jenkins-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12005227"},"dateDigested":1532767384,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I liked this story becuase of how real it was. I could tell and it didn't feel false. The only critisim I have is that the example of college throughout the entire story got kind of repetetive.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12005791","body":"I agreew with Shayna. That obviously is very upsetting about what happened, and i liked how you looked past the rejection and went for something else. I also agree with Shayna about college being the only example. Maybe before the college example you should write something that happened in your life about making the best of a situation","dateCreated":"1242139369","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"oliviah15","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/oliviah15","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1222128529\/oliviah15-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"12005071","dateCreated":"1242138813","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"butwills","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/butwills","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12005071"},"dateDigested":1532767384,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"I loved how this essay was so personal, and how you used the college example for the bulk of your essay. It really helped me to understand exactly what you meant about making the best of a situation, and understand why you feel so strongly about it.
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\nI also loved how this and how making the best of a situation can be applied to almost every aspect of life.
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\nThe only constructive comments I have are that:
\nA few of the sentences were somewhat awkwardly worded.
\nAlso, you have a lot of words and phrases like \u201cmost likely\u201d, which make your I believe come across weak, like you only kind of believe in it. If you get rid of these words, I think your point will be a lot more powerful.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}