{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12140065","dateCreated":"1242399817","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"fidan1993","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/fidan1993","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1235147613\/fidan1993-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12140065"},"dateDigested":1532767388,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"
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\n"But having these experiences in my life helps me to comfort and understand other people\u2019s problems, which is one of my best qualities."
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\n^^ i like how you explained the optimistic side of your belief rather than just saying that no one is perfect and leaving it at that.
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\n"I believe in eliminating \u201cperfection\u201d from my vocabulary."
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\nThis reminds me of a movie I saw called Black, and the main character was deaf and blind and her parents found her a tutor that taught her how to "see" and "hear" although he never taught her the word "impossible"
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\nimpossible was not in her vocabulary, and perfection is not in yours.
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I liked how you used your personal experiences to show the reader what you believed. Over all very well done and you might want to double space and make the font a little bit bigger. AWESOME!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12005721","dateCreated":"1242139307","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kaygeo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kaygeo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12005721"},"dateDigested":1532767389,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"This was very good and well-written. It was very moving and insightful. You really captured me as a reader; I was completly drawn in from the start. Very creative and realistic. Exceptional use of vocabulary.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12005907","body":"Also, you may want to cut down some of the "my life"'s that are in your story. There are quite a few","dateCreated":"1242139467","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kaygeo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kaygeo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"12005557","dateCreated":"1242139201","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"wihbeyj","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/wihbeyj","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12005557"},"dateDigested":1532767389,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"I thought that the story was great. You poured your heart and soul into it (sorry how cheesy that sounds). The vocabulary was really good, but there were a few spelling and grammar mistakes that need some work.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11904913","dateCreated":"1241796748","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dsk23","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dsk23","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11904913"},"dateDigested":1532767389,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"I think that concept of "perfection", driven by the media and our society has a profound affect on indivduals so Im glad you picked this topic. I liked how you hinted that perfection is imperfection because it is the flaws and blemishes that make people real. Thats a really good concept to get across to people, boys, girls, young and old. Just be careful with repeating certain phrases such as "My life has been filled with."","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11904523","dateCreated":"1241796238","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"oliviah15","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/oliviah15","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1222128529\/oliviah15-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11904523"},"dateDigested":1532767389,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"commnents","description":"I really enjoyed your story because most people in life try to aspire to be perfect, yet just like you said its impossible. Also, you are hundred percent rgiht that the experiences you face only help make you who you are. I loved this story and it helped me look at the word "perfection" in a new way","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11903699","dateCreated":"1241795257","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"etreb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/etreb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11903699"},"dateDigested":1532767389,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"
\nI really like how you tied in into your own life and really elaborated on it. I liked reading about your inner struggles and it was indeed very satisfying. I liked your point of view on perfection, and I feel the same way.
\nVery good job, my favorite creative nonfiction story yet.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11902719","dateCreated":"1241794167","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"tylerjlhs","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/tylerjlhs","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11902719"},"dateDigested":1532767389,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"this was a very moving story for me to read. it really pulled me in and i was able to put myself in your shoes as i read... you did a good job capturing the reader and making the story one to remember with the details and examples you used. well done.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11901923","dateCreated":"1241793297","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"desiree377","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/desiree377","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11901923"},"dateDigested":1532767389,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"This was really powerful and I loved how personal it was. I completely agree with eliminating 'perfection' from your vocabulary. This was amazing, great job!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}