{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12139645","dateCreated":"1242399228","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"fidan1993","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/fidan1993","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1235147613\/fidan1993-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12139645"},"dateDigested":1532767393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"awwwwwwwwwwwwwww, this is a heartwarming story :]
\ni liked it","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12005023","dateCreated":"1242138775","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"wihbeyj","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/wihbeyj","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12005023"},"dateDigested":1532767393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"There was a lot of passion in the writing which was good. It sounds as if you really care for this topic. However, Im not sure how this all ties into a creative nonfiction piece. Where is this? Have you been to this place before? I think you need to clear up the setting a little bit.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12005885","body":"I agree that this piece was writtin with true emotion. your feelings are appearant. but i think you should put more on what exactly you believe. include an actual aspect of what those people have that you believe in and this will make more sence.","dateCreated":"1242139452","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"12004897","dateCreated":"1242138664","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kaygeo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kaygeo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12004897"},"dateDigested":1532767393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"This was really done well, it raises awarness. I liked how you saved your last sentence to state what you believed in other than just stating it as your first sentence. It kept me guessing about what you do infact believe in. Very powerful story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11905037","dateCreated":"1241796868","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"mmcferran","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mmcferran","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11905037"},"dateDigested":1532767393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"truly amazing! This was so well done! it really does raise awarness and shsow us hgow important love is but also how lucky we are to be where we are today. I feel priveleged to have read this","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11903249","dateCreated":"1241794781","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"oliviah15","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/oliviah15","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1222128529\/oliviah15-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11903249"},"dateDigested":1532767393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"This was really good. it was really sad because everything you said was true about the harsh conditions. However, i liked how you said they were happy and continue to be strong because that is true in many cases. I really enjoyed it","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11901479","dateCreated":"1241792897","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"etreb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/etreb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11901479"},"dateDigested":1532767393,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"Positive: Your story was very well depicted and your detail really made me have a sence of what other people feel and do, that we don't even realize. I really did think it fit the creative nonfiction role well.
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\nNegative: The only thing that I saw was that you need to state that your belief in the very first sentence. This would have avoided all of my confusion and questions when I first started reading.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"11901577","body":"sence eamon? try sense haha","dateCreated":"1241792994","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"allie4522","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/allie4522","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237993324\/allie4522-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"11902395","body":"i agree with eamon in that stating what your believe is in the frist sentance would make it more clear. i really liked the ending too. this was a moving story. well done.","dateCreated":"1241793828","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"tylerjlhs","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/tylerjlhs","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"12006519","body":"i dont think you need to blatantly state what you believe in the first sentence. Not every essay is the same or should have the same format. But I do agree that you should try connecting your beliefs or what you believe in throughout the essay, not just at the end. I really liked your choice of topic though. But could you add where this actually is?
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\nGood job!","dateCreated":"1242140019","smartDate":"May 12, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dsk23","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dsk23","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"11901205","dateCreated":"1241792679","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"desiree377","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/desiree377","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11901205"},"dateDigested":1532767394,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"This was an amazing story. I love how we didn't know what you believed in until the end because it made me think about what you might believe in. Great job.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11900881","dateCreated":"1241792418","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"Shayna_Jenkins","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Shayna_Jenkins","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224158020\/Shayna_Jenkins-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11900881"},"dateDigested":1532767394,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I really liked this story. I liked how the reader didn't know what you belived in untill the end. There are no changes I would make.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11803277","dateCreated":"1241623962","smartDate":"May 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"allie4522","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/allie4522","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237993324\/allie4522-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11803277"},"dateDigested":1532767394,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"Your story is really great, I love how you kept your belief till the end, it really made you think what it could be. I wouldn't change much at all.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11803027","dateCreated":"1241623747","smartDate":"May 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dimariad","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dimariad","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11803027"},"dateDigested":1532767394,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"that was a really powerful story. the way you set the scene in the dump and then end it with the boys smilin was unbelievable. and then keeping what you believe in til the end makes the reader wonder what its going to be about.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}