{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12475021","dateCreated":"1243522344","smartDate":"May 28, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"fidan1993","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/fidan1993","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1235147613\/fidan1993-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12475021"},"dateDigested":1532767395,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comments","description":"inspirational and true :]","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12229065","dateCreated":"1242744823","smartDate":"May 19, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"mmcferran","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mmcferran","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12229065"},"dateDigested":1532767396,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"this essay really made me think.
\nI loved how you used the diamond in th erough scenario and I also loved how you compared the fake glittering jewels to decomposed waste. this story makes us rethink succes and rethink where beauty is found. this is my favorite piece. I really loved this!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12139981","dateCreated":"1242399666","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"wihbeyj","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/wihbeyj","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12139981"},"dateDigested":1532767396,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"I liked how you tied in the ending with everything. It cleared up the story a little bit, but despite this, I was still very confused by the story. In the paragraph at the end you talk about "her." Who is this person? When did she come in? I thought the story was about a diamond. I might just not have understood your symbolism, but i was very confused by the story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12140327","body":"i agree with joey. the concept about the jewls and how you tied the begining to the end was very creative. i was confused during parts of the piece. i think this took away from showing what you belive. it would help to clearify what you belive more during the story. not just at the end and begining.","dateCreated":"1242400111","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"12139977","dateCreated":"1242399662","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"etreb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/etreb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12139977"},"dateDigested":1532767396,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"
\nPositive: It was certainly very provoking and suspenseful. You started talking about a diamond and it really got my interest on how you would make a "This I Believe" piece of of this. At the end I was very pleased with the ending and with your belief.
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\nNegative: It was a little to metaphoric for me but it was indeed very unique. Due to such use of metaphoric phrasing, it kind of got confusing. So you might want to try and fix that at the end of the story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12139711","dateCreated":"1242399320","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kaygeo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kaygeo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12139711"},"dateDigested":1532767396,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"When I first began to read this, I was pretty confused. But at the end, everything made sense! I find this brilliant. I kept reading, trying to figure out what you were saying, and this got me really involved in your story. Good job! Very creative!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12139553","dateCreated":"1242399055","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"desiree377","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/desiree377","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12139553"},"dateDigested":1532767396,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I enjoyed reading this because it was very interesting. It was much different then the other stories I've read which made it stand out. It was a bit confusing in a few parts and you may want to add a few transitions to clear it up. Great job!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12139065","dateCreated":"1242398506","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"allie4522","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/allie4522","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237993324\/allie4522-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12139065"},"dateDigested":1532767396,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"This was interesting and creative, but confusing. I think you switched topics to abrubtly which left me wondering what garbage was doing in a department store, untill i realized it was a new part.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12138695","dateCreated":"1242398159","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"Shayna_Jenkins","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Shayna_Jenkins","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224158020\/Shayna_Jenkins-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12138695"},"dateDigested":1532767396,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I really liked this story. It was very heartfelt and honest. I would make it a little clearer what you are refering to when you begin talking about the garbage dump. Like a transition paragraph or something like that would make it clearer.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"12138583","dateCreated":"1242398057","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dimariad","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dimariad","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/12138583"},"dateDigested":1532767396,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"when this started i was so confused. i had absalutely no idea what you were talking about then when you started talking about "her" i got even more confused. but when you tied it up at the end it all fit together so good! you lead up to what you believe at the end so well and the whole thing was just really good!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"12138961","body":"I agree! At first i was pretty confused and then i realized what you were trying to get at. Overall, the piece was extremely good because it makes the reader keep reading so as to figure out what you are wanting the reader to take home.","dateCreated":"1242398411","smartDate":"May 15, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"oliviah15","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/oliviah15","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1222128529\/oliviah15-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"12474485","body":"i agree with both above: the beginning was unclear. this could work with OR against you. for me, it made me want to keep reading to clarify the story, but for some, they may get confused and not want to continue, know what i mean? anyway, i actually really liked the story. well done!","dateCreated":"1243521531","smartDate":"May 28, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"tylerjlhs","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/tylerjlhs","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}