{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"11602931","dateCreated":"1241103906","smartDate":"Apr 30, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dimariad","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dimariad","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11602931"},"dateDigested":1532767418,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"i like your story but it really confused me. like how can the world end and then start again? and i think if you put how it ended in the begining instead of imbetween present paragraphs it would make the piece go much smoother. but the descriptions were really good and so were the adjectives","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11601593","dateCreated":"1241102609","smartDate":"Apr 30, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"mmcferran","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mmcferran","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11601593"},"dateDigested":1532767418,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"I don't understand the history part here. I may be just not seeing it but I am very curious as to what part of this is the alternate history. Lots of good adjectives and words overall. I really enjoyed reading this.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11430555","dateCreated":"1240586064","smartDate":"Apr 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"etreb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/etreb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11430555"},"dateDigested":1532767418,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"
\nPositive: I really like the emotion that is entertwined in this story. It really makes it a good read, and allows me to emotionally connect to it. Your description was also very well developed which added a nice flow to it.
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\nNegative: I was confused throughout the entire story. I am still not really sure what was going on. You keep talking about a time of destruction but I have no idea what that is. You should try to be a lot more clearer on what is actually going on, and possibly consider taking out the tense changes, from past to present. Also there were several gramtical errors such as the sentence "Sam should be with my right now"(in the second paragraph).","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"11430913","body":"I agree with etreb. I thought all of the emotion really made you feel for Katrina. You understood how she felt, except you didnt understand what was going on. You should consider mentioning what the destruction was. It would make it much more interesting because when reading it you think, "alright I have no idea what in the world is going on." Also there were some grammatical mistakes that would clear the story up if they get fixed","dateCreated":"1240586333","smartDate":"Apr 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"wihbeyj","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/wihbeyj","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"11526495","body":"I agree, i think that this is one of most emotional pieces i have read. i would feel even worse for the family if i knew more about the destruction and what happened. i was also confused through the story, the characters confused me. besides some grammatical errors the story was well written. fix the explanation of what happend and it will make more sense. the emotion was excellent.","dateCreated":"1240931905","smartDate":"Apr 28, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"11602259","body":"this story was very moving, but i agree with everyone above in that i was slightly lost throughout various parts of the story. clarifying the charactors and makeing the story line a little smoother would help it to flow better. well done though.","dateCreated":"1241103209","smartDate":"Apr 30, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"tylerjlhs","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/tylerjlhs","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"11430385","dateCreated":"1240585942","smartDate":"Apr 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"oliviah15","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/oliviah15","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1222128529\/oliviah15-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11430385"},"dateDigested":1532767418,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"story 9","description":"This story really gave me a lot of emotion. It made me feel sad for katrina. It was an overal good story except it seemed a bit rushed through as if she was describing something instead of anything happen at that time. ALso, it doesnt really seem like an alternate history stoy like i kno you said that the world ended a year ago, but there is no evidence of showing where they are or anything.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"11430503","body":"I agree with Olivia. I really enjoyed this story too and it was very well written. It kept me interested and I wasn't confused or lost about anything going on. But, it also didn't seem like much of an alternative history story because the reader didn't find out untill the last paragraph.","dateCreated":"1240586035","smartDate":"Apr 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"Shayna_Jenkins","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Shayna_Jenkins","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224158020\/Shayna_Jenkins-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"11430675","body":"The story definetly is not an alternate history story, but if you could connect the world ending to an event or maybe even an anicent proficey then you could completely change that.","dateCreated":"1240586153","smartDate":"Apr 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"etreb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/etreb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}