{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"11904383","dateCreated":"1241796027","smartDate":"May 8, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"claire2849","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/claire2849","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11904383"},"dateDigested":1532767423,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"I liked that you waited until near the end of the story to introduce that MLK jr was white instead of black. Up until then you do a good job of outlying the racism and the struggles of African Americans, and it's that final twist with MLK jr that makes the story. Good job.
\nI noticed some grammatical errors and some possible word choice errors. You should go back and edit it (if you read it aloud you're more likely to catch mistakes as you hear them)","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11601085","dateCreated":"1241102152","smartDate":"Apr 30, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"mmcferran","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mmcferran","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11601085"},"dateDigested":1532767423,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"I liked the idea of the plot however I did not like the idea of Martin Luther King being a white supremisist. That was definetely an alternate history but it was a bit too alternative for me.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11346173","dateCreated":"1240414468","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"desiree377","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/desiree377","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11346173"},"dateDigested":1532767423,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"This was really good, but twisted in a way. I didn't expect Dr. Martin Luther King Jr. to be a white man, that was really interesting. There we're some spelling\/grammar mistakes that could be fixe.
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\n"You could be a cereal-killing white man and still be..."
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\nCereal should be serial :]","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11346107","dateCreated":"1240414397","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dimariad","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dimariad","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11346107"},"dateDigested":1532767423,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"the story was really good. but it wasnt really alternate history because all that pretty much did happen and since you didnt set a time setting, that could easily be set back to the time where it was going on.
\nbut everything was really good.. like the characters attitude and the way he talked was probably what he would actually be like","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11345927","dateCreated":"1240414195","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"oliviah15","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/oliviah15","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1222128529\/oliviah15-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11345927"},"dateDigested":1532767423,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"story 7","description":"i couldnt believe you turned Martin Luther King Jr. white?? i would never hav thought of that. The story was good. I would make sure to proof read because some sentences are a bit wrong. For instance:
\n "just happen to be darken than the majority."
\nDarken should be darker.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"11525849","body":"The officer who locked me up is known as Dr. Martin Luther King Jr., a white man of course. He is regarded as an evil man by all blacks, but to his kind, he is a hero.
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\nI couldn't believe you did this ethier, but I dont feel like it makes your story any stronger.
\nI'm a little confused as why You used MLK as a white supremicist. I feel like this doesn't make any sense. Even though its alternative history, doing this doesnt add any alternative history aspect because if MLk is a white, evil man, he is not MLK so its pointless using that name. It's just putting his name on a white man.","dateCreated":"1240931426","smartDate":"Apr 28, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dsk23","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dsk23","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"11345185","dateCreated":"1240413293","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"etreb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/etreb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11345185"},"dateDigested":1532767423,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"
\nPositive: I really liked the fact that you made this story in the point of view of the African-American with saying words like "ain't", words that were common for African's to say in the olden days. I really liked the fact also that you made MLK a white supremist this added an unexpected twist to the story.
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\nNegative: It seemed that your grammer was off in many places. I was confused if it was due to the African American's illiteracy. Making it more known that it was from the African American's point of view would have been much better.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"11345473","body":"I also thought it was a great idea to make Martin Luther King in favor of white people. I thought that was really creative. One issue I had was that the character would switch from speaking with great grammar and vocab to speaking like he had little or no education. I think you have to make a choice between the two ways of speaking. Overall I thought it was a really good story. There was a lot of emotion included in the story.","dateCreated":"1240413675","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"wihbeyj","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/wihbeyj","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"11431105","body":"I agree, you should choose to either make him have good grammar, or none because its confusing. Also I like the MLK character, that added a good twist to the story.","dateCreated":"1240586542","smartDate":"Apr 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"allie4522","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/allie4522","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237993324\/allie4522-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"11431493","body":"I agree that the idea of Martin Luther King being the opposite of what he really was is awesome alternate history. I would have liked it better if you established that he was in the begining of the story then showed what happend after that. some of the grammar and spelling was off but that is easy to fix. otherwise it was a very creative and intense story.","dateCreated":"1240586921","smartDate":"Apr 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"11344927","dateCreated":"1240412983","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kim-berry","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kim-berry","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1240585481\/kim-berry-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11344927"},"dateDigested":1532767424,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comments","description":"I really like this story. Its well written and I love how MLK is a white supremacist. The only thing about when his name was mentioned was that Dr. was still in front of it. I'm not quite sure a police officer could really have 'Dr' in front of their name. So maybe it'd just be "Martin Luther King Jr". Or Mr. King, something to that effect.
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\nAlso sometimes the tense changes and its slightly confusing, but over all this story is really well written.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"11345243","body":"I agreed with this comment in my response as well. I was very intereting to see that MLK was indeed a white supremacist. This was a very unexpected twist onto the story.","dateCreated":"1240413348","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"etreb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/etreb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"11345425","body":"i also thought that having the dr. there was a bit weird if he was a police officer. you could either just take that off or have MLK be more of an activist like he was but against the black community insted of for it.
\ni feel like even if MLK hadn't done what he did that someone else eventually would have, so if you have him activly campaigning against the african american advancement it ccould be a bit more believable","dateCreated":"1240413587","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"LDion","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/LDion","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237476747\/LDion-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"11344923","dateCreated":"1240412981","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"Shayna_Jenkins","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Shayna_Jenkins","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224158020\/Shayna_Jenkins-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11344923"},"dateDigested":1532767424,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"The way this story was written really put me in the mind of the character and stood out from the rest of the stories. I was confused untill the last paragraph to how this story was an alternative history. I would consider adding something at the beginning how Martin Luther King was white to make it obvious that this wasn't just a historical fiction story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11344461","dateCreated":"1240412451","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"LDion","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/LDion","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237476747\/LDion-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11344461"},"dateDigested":1532767424,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comments","description":"i really liked the idea of MLK being a white supremist. it added a twist that one would never really expect.
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\none thing i did notice that you might want to fix is when you said:
\n"You could be a cereal-killing white man ..."
\nit should be serial-killing, the way its spelled refers to breakfast food","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"11344613","body":"i agree with ldion in that the MLK being a white supremist did add an unexpected twist to the story. i thought that it was pretty well developed and flowed pretty well. what are you thinking to use for a title? im curious haha. well done though.","dateCreated":"1240412617","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"tylerjlhs","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/tylerjlhs","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}