{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"11701203","dateCreated":"1241449599","smartDate":"May 4, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"claire2849","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/claire2849","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11701203"},"dateDigested":1532767435,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"I love the idea for this story, considering the threat AIDs poses today. This is very well written, and the happy ending contrasts nicely with the reality of the AIDs problem. I also found myself really liking the protagonist, but I wish that you developed the future a little bit more. I wanted there to be a happy ending for Alec on a more individual level. He seemed to be living in the past, so even though he may have saved the human race, he didn't seem happy yet. Maybe you might consider hinting at some positive changes in Alec's future to end on an even better note than saving humanity.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11526961","dateCreated":"1240932272","smartDate":"Apr 28, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"mmcferran","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mmcferran","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11526961"},"dateDigested":1532767435,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"This was very intersting. You couldn't styop reading and the president was also very intersting. The idea of us all dying from aids and how one person kept trying to make a diference that would save the world is very captivating. I really like the use of your hero who lost someone to something that she then tried to defeat herself!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11431421","dateCreated":"1240586845","smartDate":"Apr 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"fidan1993","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/fidan1993","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1235147613\/fidan1993-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11431421"},"dateDigested":1532767436,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I really liked this story!!
\nGood idea! I liked how in the introduction paragraph there was a really detailed description of what was going on, also a lot of background information.
\nI also liked how scientific experimentation and research was involved.
\n\u201cEven the rose grows from the pavement\u201d.
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\nthat's really cool :]
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\n"I hoped that one day, this grave would just be another bump in the ground. Just as AIDS was just another curve in the road"
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\nI like the analogy here, although i think that it could have been made into one sentence. Also the last sentence "Which was, possibly, stopped forever by me." I think the ending could have been a little more descripitive, or final rather than leaving the reader confused as to if it was stopped or not.
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\nOverall, really creative idea :]
\ni enjoyed it","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11430723","dateCreated":"1240586192","smartDate":"Apr 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kaygeo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kaygeo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11430723"},"dateDigested":1532767436,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"This was a really good story. I thought it was such a brillant idea to write about AIDS. This story is a great example of what could possibly happen if we don't start taking this virus more seriously. Very realistic. Great ending.
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\nSome parts though were very confusing but can easily be fixed. For example: "It\u2019s hard not to when there were 33.2 citizens living with it". 33.2 what? Hundred? Thousand? Million?
\nI think you should also add more of what the protaginist is feeling through all this.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11345471","dateCreated":"1240413666","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"allie4522","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/allie4522","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237993324\/allie4522-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11345471"},"dateDigested":1532767436,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"The idea was good, but the story was a little bland. The word limit affects this, I know I've had the same problem. Also the narator is somewhat unemotional. Talking about the love of his life dying sounded like it wasn't the most important thing. Then when he relizes that a cure was discovered it's so small that if your not reading carefully you'll miss it.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11344851","dateCreated":"1240412860","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"desiree377","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/desiree377","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11344851"},"dateDigested":1532767436,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"This story was really well written. AIDs is a serious problem today and so many people don't realize this. This really portrays what the future can and most likely will be like if people don't become informed.
\nThere isn't much that you can change besides a few grammar mistakes and sentences. For example,
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\nIt\u2019s hard not to when there were 33.2 citizens living with it.
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\n33.2 what? Million, hundred thousand? That can be confusing to the reader.
\nOverall I really enjoyed this. Great job!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11344843","dateCreated":"1240412853","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11344843"},"dateDigested":1532767436,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comments","description":"The facts in the story scare me alot and make me think about the disease differently. I would of liked the story more if there was a struggle to find the cure. It would have been more exciting if the characters had to go through working hard to get nothing then finally getting the solution. The story also does not change a specific event in time. I like the way it works but i think if you saved a person who died from the virus it would be better.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11344101","dateCreated":"1240411992","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"oliviah15","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/oliviah15","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1222128529\/oliviah15-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11344101"},"dateDigested":1532767436,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Alternate History","description":"i really enjoyed this story mostly because i would never have thought of something like that. I liked how Alec wanted to get a cure for AIDS because of love. It added more of a twist to the story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"11343859","dateCreated":"1240411688","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dimariad","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dimariad","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11343859"},"dateDigested":1532767436,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"this was a great idea for a story. it put a real twist on how i think about AIDs. and how you turned an alternate history story to the future was really creative. one part i noticed was "Sure, it wasn\u2019t quite the plague, but still. People started to pay attention. It\u2019s hard not to when there were 33.2 citizens living with it. "
\nthe number error was already pointed out but the way you end the 1st sentence doesnt work too well. and i think you could reword the second 2 to be one sentence. like saying "people finally started to pay attention when" and then go on like you did (which was really good) or something like that.
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\nthe only other thing i noticed was that the story was supposed to be from a male perpestive but it seems like a female until leah comes into it.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"11344445","body":"I agree with Dominique, this story also caused me to have a more developed view on AIDs and the plague. I also would further push on how you need to check over your work before you sumbit it.","dateCreated":"1240412437","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"etreb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/etreb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"11343139","dateCreated":"1240410761","smartDate":"Apr 22, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"tylerjlhs","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/tylerjlhs","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/11343139"},"dateDigested":1532767437,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"this story was one to catch the readers eye like many, but in a different way. this topic is very moving in that people experience loss. you turned a depressing topic into a well rounded story. i really liked it.
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\nalso, it flowed pretty well. the plot seemed to have a steady pase, making it easy to follow. well done.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}