{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"9903278","dateCreated":"1236349247","smartDate":"Mar 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"tylerjlhs","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/tylerjlhs","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9903278"},"dateDigested":1532767472,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"story 10","description":"this story had a good story line, but at time it was confusing. the setting changes and whatnot, made it hard to follow in a few spots. i did enjoy reading it thought and i thought it had a great ending.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9688924","dateCreated":"1235848486","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"katieob","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/katieob","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9688924"},"dateDigested":1532767472,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment Story 10","description":"I really liked the consistent switching between past memory and present throughout the story; however, at times I found it a bit confusing. Maybe the additional use of transitions would help with this?
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\nIn general, I really enjoyed the story. =)","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9618174","dateCreated":"1235665686","smartDate":"Feb 26, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"xChangetheStars","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/xChangetheStars","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9618174"},"dateDigested":1532767472,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I love how you switch from memory to present throughout the story, it makes for a very interesting structure and helps with foreshadowing. Your story is very interesting. It definitely pulled me in and made me want to keep reading.
\n- \u201cI didn\u2019t want to get up, but if I didn\u2019t now be late for school again.\u201d \u2013forgot the \u201cI would\u201d between \u201cnow\u201d and \u201cbe\u201d
\n- The ending is a little ambiguous and maybe you want it that way. Does she actually die? Why is Darryl suddenly there? Is she in the hospital or does she just hear his voice while dying on the street?
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\nOverall, great job!
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\nSome backround information would help to clear up the begining. Things happened so fast that I lost track of which characters were which.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9516580","dateCreated":"1235493271","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"oliviah15","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/oliviah15","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1222128529\/oliviah15-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9516580"},"dateDigested":1532767472,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comments","description":"IT was very intense and extremely well thought of and good. i absolutly loved it. The only thing was that i dont like the part when Leigh is going to break up with Darryl because its a little cheesy and it was a little random. Also the endind was a bit confusing aobut where she was when Darryl was talking. However it was a very good story and i really enjoyed it","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9515960","dateCreated":"1235492266","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dimariad","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dimariad","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9515960"},"dateDigested":1532767472,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"Possitive: it was really catchy and it made me not want to stop reading it
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\nNegative: the setting jumped around a lot and it was kind of confusing. a bunch of things were unnecessary. and i dont understand how in the begining shes talking about how she hated to relive the past and in the end shes dead.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9514860","dateCreated":"1235491096","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kaygeo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kaygeo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9514860"},"dateDigested":1532767472,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"This was a really good story that kept me hooked as soon as I began reading it. I found the way you decided to write your story, with the flashbacks, very clever. Some parts of your story is very confusing, like how Darryl and Imani were so close at the beginning. But as soon as they break up, he asks Leigh out right away. There were little grammatical errors and some sentences that need to be re-read and fixed but all in all, this was a great and I truly enjoyed it.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"9615728","body":"i really enjoyed your story, it was very easy to become hooked in it. everything seemed to happen to her so fast, which have a very hopeless feeling, that she was also feeeling. other than a few minor gramatical things, i thought the story was very well writen.","dateCreated":"1235663571","smartDate":"Feb 26, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kassondramaie","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kassondramaie","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"9514602","dateCreated":"1235490893","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"wihbeyj","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/wihbeyj","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9514602"},"dateDigested":1532767473,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"I liked how the story would go in and out between her mom dieing and the present. I thought that was very cool. I was not expecting the story to end like that at all.
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\nThere was not a lot of description. It would have been better if the setting and characters were described more.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9513868","dateCreated":"1235490352","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"butwills","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/butwills","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9513868"},"dateDigested":1532767473,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"The short paragraphs worked really with your fast moving story.
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\nI loved the way you moved back and forth between the present and the past, because it exphisized how much your main character is going through.
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\nThe only part that somewhat confused me was that initially, Daryll and Imani seem to be incredibly close, especially when Daryll's hurt. Then moments after Imani breaks up with Daryll, he asks the main character out. It was odd that Daryll wasn't at all phased by the break up, nor was the main character suspicious of the suddenness of it all.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}