{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"9903138","dateCreated":"1236349102","smartDate":"Mar 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"tylerjlhs","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/tylerjlhs","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9903138"},"dateDigested":1532767474,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"story 9","description":"i really liked the interaction of the charactors and how descriptive the story was. this is well written, but the ending could have used more of a closing. good job!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9617894","dateCreated":"1235665466","smartDate":"Feb 26, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"fidan1993","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/fidan1993","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1235147613\/fidan1993-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9617894"},"dateDigested":1532767474,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"Love the setting and the accents!","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9615820","dateCreated":"1235663655","smartDate":"Feb 26, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"kim-berry","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kim-berry","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1240585481\/kim-berry-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9615820"},"dateDigested":1532767474,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"I really liked the story, its set up well and the dialogue is convincing. The accent attempt was pretty good too. The only negative to it was that I started to imagine P.S. I Love You with the argument. Maybe its just my brain relating it to movies, but that and some grammar mistakes was the only negatives I could see.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9515246","dateCreated":"1235491468","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"butwills","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/butwills","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9515246"},"dateDigested":1532767475,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"I loved setting description. Espiecially when you were descrining Ruins Hill, I felt like I was right there with the character. Also, it was a really cool idea to set your story in Ireland.
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\nThis story seemed to jump around alot, and had a lot going on, without any real transition, so it was hard to focus on the plot, or determine what the focus of the plot was.
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\nAlso, the story needs some closure, or some sign that the story has some to an end.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9514944","dateCreated":"1235491164","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"desiree377","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/desiree377","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9514944"},"dateDigested":1532767475,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"This was very discriptive, it made me feel like I was there the whole time everything was happening. One thing I didn't like was how it ended so quickly. You should elaborate and extend the ending more. A good story has to have a good ending. Overall I enjoyed reading this.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9514244","dateCreated":"1235490614","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9514244"},"dateDigested":1532767475,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment Story 9","description":"Positive: Story was very descriptive. You did an excellent job of catching the reader in the beggining of the story with the action and suspence. I could see the different rooms you went into perfectly through the descriptions.
\nNegative\/Constructive: I was lost in what happened when you went into the closet. Everything happened so fast. The descriptions were incredible throughout but I didnt understand what had happened. The story also needed some closure. Otherwise, awesome descriptions.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9514028","dateCreated":"1235490473","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"wihbeyj","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/wihbeyj","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9514028"},"dateDigested":1532767475,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"The description was excellent. I loved how you described Ruins Hill. I felt as if I was there.
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\nI felt that the plot could have used a little work. It only talked about this girl and her relationships. It needed more of a problem. Other than that, I enjoyed it very much and the description made it very good.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9513048","dateCreated":"1235489884","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dimariad","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dimariad","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9513048"},"dateDigested":1532767475,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"Positive: the descriptions were really good and how you used the way the talked differenty was really creative
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\nNegative: it just kind of ended. there was no closing to the story. it needs a little more revision. she called daryl a scottish jerk but then said they were in ireland? and there wasn't really a point to the title, if there was supposed to be one.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9512578","dateCreated":"1235489592","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"etreb","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/etreb","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9512578"},"dateDigested":1532767475,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"
\nPositive: very good description in many different areas. The creative use of words when refering to things like Allen's eyes really helped me to visualize everything and make it feel like i was there.
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\nNegative: at the beginning of the story I am quite confused, it talks of the cold and them running and trying to escape but I have no idea what or why. It is only later in the story that I find out. Try to add more details on what is going on so the reader doesn't get confused. Other than that it was a good story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9403482","dateCreated":"1235146837","smartDate":"Feb 20, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"Shayna_Jenkins","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Shayna_Jenkins","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224158020\/Shayna_Jenkins-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9403482"},"dateDigested":1532767475,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"The setting was described really clearly, so I could really picture what was going on in my head. Sometimes the description of the surroundings was too much so it distracted me from what was actually going on and made it hard to stay focused on the plot.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"9569930","body":"I agree with shayna because it was good description, but a little too much as well. However, i really enjoyed the last paragraph about allen and drowning. The beginning wit the dialogue between Darrly and lauren was a bit hard to follow","dateCreated":"1235583041","smartDate":"Feb 25, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"oliviah15","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/oliviah15","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1222128529\/oliviah15-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}