{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"9689068","dateCreated":"1235849146","smartDate":"Feb 28, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"katieob","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/katieob","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9689068"},"dateDigested":1532767492,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment Story 02","description":"The first paragraph the story sets the scene wonderfully. I was able to see the &quot;golden color&quot; throughout the entire story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9615720","dateCreated":"1235663564","smartDate":"Feb 26, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"mmcferran","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mmcferran","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9615720"},"dateDigested":1532767492,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"comment","description":"1.Needs some revision. You said the room was balzing yellow as the sun. do you mean like the sun?<br \/>\n2.You said the room was yellow then you said it was the color of a cantelope. Cantelopes are usually orange or peachy colored.<br \/>\n3.your plot is very confusing.<br \/>\n4.There was some good description but some parts had a little too much.<br \/>\nAll in all good but with alittle revision it could be great.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9585386","dateCreated":"1235601374","smartDate":"Feb 25, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"fidan1993","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/fidan1993","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1235147613\/fidan1993-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9585386"},"dateDigested":1532767492,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"Positive: Made me see life through an artists viewpoint, description was good and the conclusion and last sentence balances out the story perfectly. <br \/>\nFavorite line &quot;Even though it is late July, the shade of the canopied trees covers our summer skin with goose bumps.&quot; Made me feel something.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nNegative: Too calm, and too peaceful, sounds a little bit like a made up world","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9516266","dateCreated":"1235492790","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9516266"},"dateDigested":1532767492,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Story 2","description":"I was mourning for the loss of my love but joyous in the arrival of my best friend Isabel. She is someone I can share anything with, my hopes, my dreams, my fears. She liked...<br \/>\nthis is where i got confused but i reread and understand. See my other comments. If you get two of this comment its becuase i am impatient and click the post button twice.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9515658","dateCreated":"1235491911","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9515658"},"dateDigested":1532767492,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Story 2","description":"Wow, I hit post twice, now there are three of my posts on here. <br \/>\nMy bad.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9515614","dateCreated":"1235491851","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9515614"},"dateDigested":1532767493,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Settting Story 2 ","description":"Positive: I could really understand and feel the description of the setting in the first paragraph. Through your descriptions I also noticed how important the place is to you. Great descriptions!<br \/>\nNegative\/Constructive: An introduction to who Isabel was would help me initially understand what it ment when she died.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"9902646","body":"i agree with drew in that the way you wrote the opening paragraph, we were easily able to feel like we were in the setting you were creating. the fact that you were able to show how special the place was to you, made it so much more meaningful because you can tell that you put your heart into it. i also agree with drew that there should have been more of a background for some of the people, but otherwise, good job!","dateCreated":"1236348523","smartDate":"Mar 6, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"tylerjlhs","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/tylerjlhs","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"9515594","dateCreated":"1235491832","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9515594"},"dateDigested":1532767493,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Settting Story 2 ","description":"Positive: I could really understand and feel the description of the setting in the first paragraph. Through your descriptions I also noticed how important the place is to you. Great descriptions!<br \/>\nNegative\/Constructive: An introduction to who Isabel was would help me initially understand what it ment when she died.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"9515912","body":"re-reading now. Will comment again","dateCreated":"1235492234","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"DrewGauvain","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/DrewGauvain","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1237994231\/DrewGauvain-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"9515476","dateCreated":"1235491703","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"Shayna_Jenkins","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Shayna_Jenkins","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1224158020\/Shayna_Jenkins-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9515476"},"dateDigested":1532767493,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"I really liked this story and felt it was a new idea, different from other books I have read. It seemed like a really personal story and wans't too long, so I stayed interested. My only negative comment is that the first paragraph uses &quot;our&quot; and then for the rest of the story it is told in &quot;I&quot;.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9514230","dateCreated":"1235490598","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"claire2849","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/claire2849","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9514230"},"dateDigested":1532767493,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"This story is well written. The figurative language and the level of description as well as the comparisons to other forces of nature really convey the meaning of the sanctuary and the tree.  I also like how concise your story is.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"9403598","dateCreated":"1235146970","smartDate":"Feb 20, 2009","userCreated":{"username":"dsk23","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dsk23","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sem2creativewriting.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/9403598"},"dateDigested":1532767493,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comment","description":"Your story is really unconventional in the way you've described your emotions and the special place that you are. I think you've used a good variety of sentence structure, creating interest. I like how you started the story outside- it introduces the reader to nature and trees, which connects back to the &quot;dreaming tree.&quot; There's that duality there. To unite the story and make it more cohesive, you could end the story with some descriptions of the outside again, to pull it all together.:)","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}